Trucker Babe
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Trucker Babe
a story poem buk asks...ok, I will try that?
a butterfly scar
at the small of her back
cheap perfume
but the smell lingers
lewd sultry eyeliner
gaze behind lashes
out
biker bar babe
lifts her top at rallies
watch her hair flow
wildly
she winks at truckers
hog hopping Harley chick
mama always said
you is a bad girl
and the mirror ain't one to lie
crap
I did not realize there was rating system in effect
next time email the crition for a 10 of 10 poem
and I promise I will do better
a butterfly scar at the small of her back -cliche -1
cheap perfume but the smell lingers-cliche -1
lewd sultry eyeliner -**mek -1
gaze behind lashes out - really awkward phrasing -2
biker bar babe -cliche -1
lifts her top at rallies -Jerry Springer +5!!!!!!!
watch her hair flow wildly -cliche -1
she winks at truckers -Who doesn't: 0!
hog hopping Harley chick - how do you manage to alliterate AND be unreadable at the same time?????? - 3
mama always said you is a bad girl - Song of the South again??? -1
and the mirror ain't one to lie - More ZipideeDooDah! - 0
I get a -5!!!!
But I give great poems a 6 or a 10.
hot young trucker babe